说是机翻都是在侮辱翻译软件的程度
一开始觉得有几处怪怪的,但毕竟是译本也算正常就没有太在意,直到越来越频繁,心生傲气:我到要看看原文到底是怎么写的。就这样上半部分揪了不少,到后半就一整个放弃,这也归功于剧情越来越拖沓无聊也就不再精读。
首先是无可厚非的错译(低级错误)
- with a broad beaming smile full of milk teeth
(附加:这是对同埃文下棋的小女孩的描写)
(her)她咧开嘴绽放出耀眼的笑容,露出一口牛奶般的牙齿
(rather)她露出满是乳牙的灿烂笑容接受了,
- you have nothing to feel guilty for.
(her)你没有什么需要羞愧的。
(rather)你没有什么好内疚的。
- there has never been anything about him, about his personhood, which could make the big men uncomfortable, the seniors, judges, cabinet ministers.
(her)他身上,他的人格里从来没有任何一点让那些大人物不舒服,无论是高年级学生还是法官、内阁部长。
(rather)关于他本人,关于他为人品质,从来没有任何事情让高层官员、法官、内阁部长等权贵不舒服。
其次是蹩脚的翻译(偏主观)
- major regrets like declining or rather failing to say anything at his own father's funeral
(her)大的遗憾,如推辞或不能够在自己父亲的葬礼上说任何话
(rather)重大的遗憾,比如在父亲的葬礼上拒绝发言,或者说根本没能说任何话
- in the centre of the floor, a number of tables are arranged in a kind of squared U-shape,
(her)在地面的中心,
(rather)在场地中央,
- what do you think, would you like to go out and celebrate?
(her)你怎么想呢。
(rather)你觉得怎么样。
- surrounded by these blustering middle-aged people
(her)他被围绕于这一群话音震耳的中年人之中
(rather)被这些盛气凌人的中年人包围着
- but how to know, how to interprete the watching, when he doesn't say anything to her or even seem to want to?
(her)但如何知道,如何解读这一注视,当他一言不发,甚至似乎无意于说什么时?
(rather)但是,当他没有对她说任何话,甚至似乎也不想说的时候,要如何知晓,又该如何解读这种注视呢?
- to offer an explanation would suggest that something is in need of explaining, raising the spectre of other, alternative explanations, which have as yet occurred to no one.
(her)如果作出解释,就暗示了有事情需要解释,就引出了其他不同解释的影子,而它目前还没有出现在任何人的脑子里。
(rather)试图给出解释,就意味着存在需要解释的事情,这又会引发人们对其他可能解释的思考,而这些解释目前还无人想到。
- The fact that they have been left alone together is present to her with a kind of insistent intrusive feeling.
(her)给她带来了一种紧迫、侵扰的感觉
(rather)让她产生一种挥之不去的压迫感
- is the word 'passionate', or is it not, basically an obscene item of vocabulary?
(her)“激情”这个词基本上是不是,还是说不是,一个淫秽的词?
(rather)“热情”这个词,本质上究竟算不算,是一种低俗的词汇?
- without meaning to, without knowing how not to.
(her)无意如此,也不知怎么不如此。
(rather)并非有意为之,也不知该如何避免。
- overriding all the contrary principles and making them fall away into nothing.
(her)它会凌驾于所有相反的原则,削弱它们直至消亡
(rather)凌驾于所有相反的原则之上,使其化为乌有